Prologue
Have you ever experienced a life changing event? Something happened this summer that would affect two people who would go to school together. Their names were Rebecca and more informally know as Becca. Becca has lived in town of Idaho Falls all her life. Becca is a caring, beautiful and smart. Then there is the second person. His name is Matthew. Everyone calls him Matt except his mom. They moved to Idaho Falls over the summer. Matt was a average jock who had a smart brain on his shoulders. They could not know the effect that there meeting would have on each other and their friends. They lived just far enough away that they would not get to know each other until school started. Their groups had been fighting for the longest time ever. One could only speculate the sparks that would fly at school and church with these two people meeting. Some may see it as good others may see it as bad. One just needs to believe in fairy tales and have hope that this story would have a happy ending.
very interesting! seems like a cute story that could be something that id want to read.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I would agree with Maggie that it would be a cute story to read. It is obviously a chick story...I could envision it with a cover that has a simple girl on it and Fabio with his hair flowing in the wind and holding roses...
ReplyDeleteNorma Jean
Well written, yet totally a chick story.
ReplyDeleteWell written and clear. It's more of a summary, though. You've basically given away the story on your opening page. Who is the main character of this story, Becca or Matthew? I would suggest focusing on one of the characters. Tell it from their point of view and then have them meet the love interest.
ReplyDeleteDon't get me wrong, I love romance stories (I especially love romantic comedy movies). But a big problem with these stories is their predictability. I'm not saying you have to write a story where they don't end up together. But the stories that have a unique, fresh angle work better than the predictable ones.
This story is not a Fantasy or suspence it is romance with high school students. You can't judge a book by its first page.
ReplyDeleteThis was a good start! It makes me want to find out why it is so important that they meet!! Well written and good job!
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